To be heard with understanding

Category: Writers Block

Post 1 by Sage Rose (the Zone BBS remains forever my home page) on Monday, 30-Aug-2010 5:46:43

When I try to make sense of my thoughts
Scattered and lost
I’m closer to tears
And farther from love
I’d rather just leave them
And carry on with my day
Keep all of my frustrations
Locked so far away
The truth is like water
It drowns the best of me
I see the reflections
Of who I want to be
I am myself
Whoever that is
An empty shell who might have potential
If I could just live
I feel dead
Cold and hollow and darkness surrounds
The whole of me I once was
This silence is profound
Couldn’t I surrender
To the light that is within?
Or is it too far gone
To count for anything?
My heart beats still
But it might as well stop
I give and I give
Just to watch my world collapse
I don’t know where I’m going
But I’m going half heartedly
Where is the free spirit
That was once part of me?
If I’m running toward something better
Than this place that seems so dull
The cup is half empty
But I want it to be half full
I want to see the lighter side
And feel I’m not standing still
I want to feel alive
With that strong familiar thrill
Walking in the sunlight
Gone so far from here
Where this existence makes sense
And the silence Isn’t fear
I don’t want the sadness
I don’t want lonely nights
I want to know myself
And know it feels right
My skin is mine alone
I don’t want it to crawl
I want to know that I can cry
And I’ll still get through it all
But when love doesn’t find me
And I can’t feel the sudden rush
To know what it feels like
To lose my sense of time in us
But maybe I am just a dreamer
And you, so far away
I am trying to make sense of my thoughts
Tormented by each day.

Post 2 by Grace (I've now got the ggold prolific poster award! wahoo! well done to me!) on Monday, 30-Aug-2010 18:13:48

Because you write with understanding

...then you are heard in the same manner

Excellent writing that cuts beyond the surface
delving deeper

getting
and
being real

Post 3 by Sage Rose (the Zone BBS remains forever my home page) on Tuesday, 31-Aug-2010 5:24:41

Thank you

Post 4 by Sword of Sapphire (Whether you agree with my opinion or not, you're still gonna read it!) on Tuesday, 31-Aug-2010 14:42:30

Very beautiful piece. Full of soul-searching.

Post 5 by AgateRain (Believe it or not, everything on me and about me is real!) on Tuesday, 31-Aug-2010 17:44:42

I love that! I wish I was a poetry lover, but for now I'm focusing on my autobiography.

Post 6 by Sage Rose (the Zone BBS remains forever my home page) on Wednesday, 01-Sep-2010 1:59:58

I just write what I feel, but thank you. I appreciate the posative feedback. It makes me want to write more.

Post 7 by Grace (I've now got the ggold prolific poster award! wahoo! well done to me!) on Thursday, 07-Apr-2011 6:32:38

I just have a need to say it again,


Because you write with understanding

...then you are heard in the same manner

Excellent writing that cuts beyond the surface
delving deeper

getting
and
being real

Please, continue to share

Connie G

Post 8 by Shadow_Cat (I've now got the silver prolific poster award! wahoo!) on Thursday, 07-Apr-2011 15:18:45

Damn, that's very good. And, for my own personal reasons, it hits home for me right now. Oh, for the days that I used to be able to write like that, so long ago. Glad you posted it, Sage. Thanks.